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I came to be, long ages past it seems to me,
In the land of the hidden people,
The painted and tattooed people
Who carved their spirits into stone,
In geometry and animal forms,
But keeping their secrets unwritten,
Rather dying than reveal the drunken poesy
That spilled from the heather onto their lips.
Fields to school me, filled with wheat,
Or fly-buzzed sheep and cattle.
Basket of eggs lined with silver filigree,
Where sea surrounds to fuse with skies
Rarely entirely blue.

Settling in time, for the next long age,
I lived as a young man in the land of Aneirin,
Gododdin, land between the walls.
An age of craft and riches,
Of walking the Lady's stony breasts,
Meeting with the stag in the deep wood,
Learning the wonders of the trees.
An age of climbing, striving,
Gaining gold and home,
Even a powder blue Lady of Mercy.
An age, as it became, of the Tower,
Building so much on sand, you see -
Wife and work until they broke me.

And so to a new age, and a new land,
Emergent moth, drab and closer to the light.
That light become a new, red, love,
(Still harkening for Celtic shores by blood)
And all begins anew.
Anew in arid, sun-chased places,
Scrubby trees root in sun-dried seas,
Beneath me a league of shellfish stone
And black gold squeezed from life
By geological weights of time.
Petroglyphs tell faintly of the earliest here,
Camped by spring to trade and follow bison,
Soft Jumano whispers on the wind.

Here in this age I have found an oasis, my magic,
Children brought by love, mine now wholehearted.
The littlest Stitch, my flesh, glitched and knows it, alas -
My care and my happy thought.
I'm looking to future aeons.
A poem about my journey through life, as child, young and middle aged man. I've come from the farmlands of Scotland to city life, had a high-flowing career followed by a messy divorce and nervous breakdown, then rediscovered myself thousands of miles away in smalltown Texas, finding love, a "hers,mine and ours" family and caring for my autistic son. Now I'm wondering what the future holds.
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Achija Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Achija Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The pleasure was all mine.
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ancientpoet Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
Sounds like my life to a degree, though I never found a lady who could love as I do, sadly. I no longer wonder what the future holds, I give back what I can and sleep in the peace and comfort of what I have left. Beautiful soliloquy on your life :)

Patrick
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Patrick.

"I give back what I can and sleep in the peace and comfort of what I have left."

That sounds like something I could definitely be happy to aspire to. You're a wise man, my friend.

BB, Steve
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ancientpoet Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
I've even been called ancient LOL My youngest son calls me oldie, lovingly, but mostly pops, thankfully. Have a good night Steve, I'm off for the day.

Patrick
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This was another great poem. I wonder if you have ever written short stories. I liked the reference to Scotland. The pictish paint and carved stones. I have never been there, but it looks magnificent (the country and wild there).
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hi belisarius - thanks for the kind words and encouragement yet again. It's a lot of years since I've written short stories, but I've certainly been thinking about doing so again.
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You should write a short story, I could imagine that the elements of your style would be well suited to that task.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I've got a couple in mind. There's one which would be pretty whimsical, a retelling of a fairie story I made up for my daughter when she was tiny, and another far more serious. I'll need to find the time. :-)
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Just write it small bits at a time. In the end it will be worth it.
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FallenfromtheStarz Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is like a small story,and I liked the way you put your life and loved the way you used your imagery.I think you should have wrote individual poems about each portion of your life,because this poem is rather long,and you almost lose the thought you were thinking when you first arrive onto this poem.But overall nicely done.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the short crit. I must admit I don't think it is an overly long piece - It's not a Paradise Lost or Waste Land - but I realize others' mileage may vary. I'm glad you liked it overall.
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FallenfromtheStarz Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm.Very true.I'd have to agree with you there.Well,with the long piece and being such a long time,it was seemed over too quickly.What I meant was that if you as well wrote every time period,I think more could have been focused in little series or string of poems to sort of show the expansion of your life or journey,and I think the age of man in your poem seem like life is short,and maybe thAt was point of this poem.I did lie it,very much so.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You've got a definite point about one poem being too little for someone's life - and I'll admit to feeling "I better finish this before it grows tentacles and becomes an epic". I've written a couple of other very autobiographical pieces already, and I'm sure there will be others. I feel like 47 years has gone by in a flash, but there's been a lot packed into them. I hope those opposed feelings come across in the piece.

Thank you *very* much for the engaging crit and comments which make me think about what I've written - it's very helpful to the future process, I think.

Warmest Regards, C
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FallenfromtheStarz Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
MMhmm.Glad I could help:D I am a poet also.I read very much and write just the same.I've read long poems that are quite the same as this one.A quick run through of a life and the experiences,although,there is so much more in between life and death I love to hear about.I'm not someone who just sits there and reads just anything.I've read so much,and written,I feel my evaluations are formed from a basic of my understanding.I love poetry with everything I have,long poems cannot contain such epic existence.I like the way you worded that,engaging crit.I'm glad I can share an equal art omnipotent conversation.I do not get that much.I'm glad you understand my point of view because by all means,this is your poem and its done however you may choose:D
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Lupana Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very nicely written. And I can relate to your struggle with having an autistic son. My 16-year-old brother has aspergers/Fragile X, which are both very similar conditions.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. It breaks my heart when my son, who is seven, says he has a glitch, like Stitch. We've never told him he has autism or treated him very differently from our other three, but he's aware that sometime these strong emotions take a hold of him and control him, he's aware of his differences.
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Lupana Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, my brother does something similar. We've never outright told him either but as you know these kids are smart and he's heard us talk about autism and aspergers enough, and sometimes when he introduces himself I've heard him say "I have autism". Have you ever heard of a program called NACD? Its a great thing for kids with special needs. They help taylor a special learning program from for the specific needs of the child. Its worth looking into for sure, if your interested.
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be sure to check it out. Thank you.
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EscapingThePast Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
This is absolutely amazing, and I love the story it tells. :clap:
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Cernig Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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